I quickly glanced at your opening page.
One suggestion would to make all of the text fit within the background image so that the text doesn't overrun it, as it gets hard to read.
"Greetings! I am Dana your Hostess. Many of you Will know me from my two years operating
w-i-c-c-a-n.org. AKindOfMagick.Com is going to take the best part's of w-i-c-c-a-n.org and incorperate
them while casting aside all of the baggage ,this site is going to be a collection of thoughts from
the Magickal to the Mundane! "
(whoops out kdictionary)
A few grammar errors. "Many of you Will". Will should not be capitalized. Also, "aside all of the baggage ,this site" the comma should be after baggage and before the space. "and incorperate them" should be "incorporate". Finally, I don't believe you need to use the apostrophe on "to take the best part's of". I believe just using "parts" would do. Hope this helps you out.
(edit)Also, "Well here we are on our new host if you've been having trouble accessing the site its because we were
in the process of moving to a different hosting company. " The "its" should be "it's". Another way to rewrite it would be "Well, here we are on our new host. If you have been having trouble accessing the site it is because we were in the process of moving to a different hosting company." Hope this helps you more.
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[Edited by Vincent Paglione on 09-11-2000 at 10:43 PM]
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